Wow.. haha. Yeah. That made me laugh. =D This is a 4/5 for me, just because of grammar mistakes and parts where the flow was off just a smidge. This is super great for a first poem! Good job, and keep writing.
Dr seuss is da BOMB lol... u did really well with this poem, your rhyme scheme/flow was extremelely well kept and the story fit it well because of it's child-like morale. lol.. i know this will sound wierd but my favorite part is how you used a lime.. I would've never thought a lime.. it's such a unique fruit to use in poetry... like.. most would have said like tomato or something... I love it!