Comments : Tequila Loves Me

  • 10 years ago

    by Cindy

    Gem
    You did a awesome job on this piece. The pain she is feeling comes throguh in your words.
    Take Care Love Cindy

  • 10 years ago

    by Debbie

    Hey Gem!

    This poem was interestingly sad; it reminded me of a movie which showed this typical reaction of the subject. It's quite unusual to know the subject willingly submitted to her own demise. But it's nice. :) My pleasure to read. All the best and take care!

    Love,
    Debbie

  • 10 years ago

    by geeeeee

    "Clutching the bottle tightly in her fist
    She finally succumbed to the alcohols kiss"

    Everybody seems to find 'comfort' in something. Alcohol is one of the many options. Numbing the pain away. Yet, as I'm underage, I could feel the pain in this poem. A sad but gripping poem.

    All the best.

  • 10 years ago

    by Mr M

    So articulate and well written. I loved it!

  • 10 years ago

    by Krzysztof J

    Its good Gem, flows very nicely the cheating part is bad and so is the drinking so i dont aprove of any lol but a great poem none the less :)) glad you're writing again :))

  • 10 years ago

    by *Charisma*

    Very powerful. You can totally picture this whole piece! Very well done Gem! Your poems always have a way that the reader can put themselves in that place and really FEEL what you are writing. Good job!
    Charisma*

  • 10 years ago

    by Midnight Sun

    I really like this because it comes from the stand point of an alcoholic woman...not that there aren't any but usually it talks about men finding comfort in the bottle. Great job with this one, Gem! :) I miss your stuff!
    ~Midnight Sun

  • 10 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    Dang this is soooooo sad. Is it true? I'm sorry if it is. Is it about that guy in the pic I'm sorry if these questions are making you sad. Awesome poem. 5/5
    -vino

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    This is so sad, and yet so beautifully written.
    I loved the imagery you portrayed in this, it creates very vivid pictures, and the emotion and depth is overwhelming...beautiful job with this.

  • 10 years ago

    by bella

    Good poem

  • 10 years ago

    by blackheartslove

    This is a really good poem!
    your and amazing writer!
    I love your choice of words.... its a beautiful poem even if it is sad.

  • This is great i love it !!!!

  • 10 years ago

    by Dan

    One word: WOW! Its deep and heartfelt, and its a problem that can happen and you are drawing excellent attention to it

  • 10 years ago

    by Hebe

    What a sad poem.
    Your word choice is great.
    Great imagery.
    Beautiful piece of writing.
    Take care

  • 10 years ago

    by IdTakeABulletForYou

    What's up with the "cos" m'dear? I thought your poems would be flowing, like water... all your contest poems are beautiful but this seems... Informal...

    No punctuation, short-handed words... yet, it flows beautifully....

    tightly in her fist= "tightly withIN her fist" ?

    Other than the lack of punctuation, and the one "cos" which made the poem seem too informal, this poem flowed wonderfully and was beauitifully written. I love the idea of this poem... however, I did think you needed to add a little more information on what was going on in this young woman's life, make the poem a little more personal for the reader, delve deeper into her emotions to come up with something unique and touching all the same.

    Still, it was overall wonderful. Great job =]

    5/5
    ~Stephen White

  • 10 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I absolutely positively LOVE this piece. It way outdoes mine with this title :[ Lol, your wording was great and along with the imagery, it was fantastic. You had me held into your poem from the very first line up until the last one.

    "Hours later she slumped down amongst the debris
    Singing loud; "Never mind, Tequila loves me!""

    ^^ I LOVE those lines, they really stood out to me.

    5.5
    :]

  • 10 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    This is an amazing piece of work you have done here! 5/5 I love it!

  • 10 years ago

    by Kelly

    Ok, i know im not supposed to, but i found it funny. Sorry if that offends you but i can just imagone a girl sitting on her kitchen floor singing tequilla loves me, sorry i guess it tickled my funny bone! Anyway it is an amazing poem all the same and every girl has dealt with a cheating scumbag by going through this at one point or another.
    Excellent poem.

    Kelly
    xx

  • 10 years ago

    by kimberly

    :) truth and beautiful written!

  • 10 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    Wow, the ending was awesome, especially the last line. It ended the poem perfectly. It was almost like a scene from a movie. Great write. 5/5

    marcella