This poem was interestingly sad; it reminded me of a movie which showed this typical reaction of the subject. It's quite unusual to know the subject willingly submitted to her own demise. But it's nice. :) My pleasure to read. All the best and take care!
Very powerful. You can totally picture this whole piece! Very well done Gem! Your poems always have a way that the reader can put themselves in that place and really FEEL what you are writing. Good job!
I really like this because it comes from the stand point of an alcoholic woman...not that there aren't any but usually it talks about men finding comfort in the bottle. Great job with this one, Gem! :) I miss your stuff!
What's up with the "cos" m'dear? I thought your poems would be flowing, like water... all your contest poems are beautiful but this seems... Informal...
No punctuation, short-handed words... yet, it flows beautifully....
tightly in her fist= "tightly withIN her fist" ?
Other than the lack of punctuation, and the one "cos" which made the poem seem too informal, this poem flowed wonderfully and was beauitifully written. I love the idea of this poem... however, I did think you needed to add a little more information on what was going on in this young woman's life, make the poem a little more personal for the reader, delve deeper into her emotions to come up with something unique and touching all the same.
I absolutely positively LOVE this piece. It way outdoes mine with this title :[ Lol, your wording was great and along with the imagery, it was fantastic. You had me held into your poem from the very first line up until the last one.
"Hours later she slumped down amongst the debris
Singing loud; "Never mind, Tequila loves me!""
^^ I LOVE those lines, they really stood out to me.
Ok, i know im not supposed to, but i found it funny. Sorry if that offends you but i can just imagone a girl sitting on her kitchen floor singing tequilla loves me, sorry i guess it tickled my funny bone! Anyway it is an amazing poem all the same and every girl has dealt with a cheating scumbag by going through this at one point or another.