Gem
You did a awesome job on this piece. The pain she is feeling comes throguh in your words.
Take Care Love Cindy

Hey Gem!

This poem was interestingly sad; it reminded me of a movie which showed this typical reaction of the subject. It's quite unusual to know the subject willingly submitted to her own demise. But it's nice. :) My pleasure to read. All the best and take care!

Love,
Debbie

"Clutching the bottle tightly in her fist
She finally succumbed to the alcohols kiss"

Everybody seems to find 'comfort' in something. Alcohol is one of the many options. Numbing the pain away. Yet, as I'm underage, I could feel the pain in this poem. A sad but gripping poem.

All the best.

So articulate and well written. I loved it!

Its good Gem, flows very nicely the cheating part is bad and so is the drinking so i dont aprove of any lol but a great poem none the less :)) glad you're writing again :))

Very powerful. You can totally picture this whole piece! Very well done Gem! Your poems always have a way that the reader can put themselves in that place and really FEEL what you are writing. Good job!
Charisma*

I really like this because it comes from the stand point of an alcoholic woman...not that there aren't any but usually it talks about men finding comfort in the bottle. Great job with this one, Gem! :) I miss your stuff!
~Midnight Sun

Dang this is soooooo sad. Is it true? I'm sorry if it is. Is it about that guy in the pic I'm sorry if these questions are making you sad. Awesome poem. 5/5
-vino

This is so sad, and yet so beautifully written.
I loved the imagery you portrayed in this, it creates very vivid pictures, and the emotion and depth is overwhelming...beautiful job with this.

Good poem

This is a really good poem!
your and amazing writer!
I love your choice of words.... its a beautiful poem even if it is sad.

This is great i love it !!!!

One word: WOW! Its deep and heartfelt, and its a problem that can happen and you are drawing excellent attention to it

What a sad poem.
Your word choice is great.
Great imagery.
Beautiful piece of writing.
Take care

What's up with the "cos" m'dear? I thought your poems would be flowing, like water... all your contest poems are beautiful but this seems... Informal...

No punctuation, short-handed words... yet, it flows beautifully....

tightly in her fist= "tightly withIN her fist" ?

Other than the lack of punctuation, and the one "cos" which made the poem seem too informal, this poem flowed wonderfully and was beauitifully written. I love the idea of this poem... however, I did think you needed to add a little more information on what was going on in this young woman's life, make the poem a little more personal for the reader, delve deeper into her emotions to come up with something unique and touching all the same.

Still, it was overall wonderful. Great job =]

5/5
~Stephen White

I absolutely positively LOVE this piece. It way outdoes mine with this title :[ Lol, your wording was great and along with the imagery, it was fantastic. You had me held into your poem from the very first line up until the last one.

"Hours later she slumped down amongst the debris
Singing loud; "Never mind, Tequila loves me!""

^^ I LOVE those lines, they really stood out to me.

5.5
:]

This is an amazing piece of work you have done here! 5/5 I love it!

Ok, i know im not supposed to, but i found it funny. Sorry if that offends you but i can just imagone a girl sitting on her kitchen floor singing tequilla loves me, sorry i guess it tickled my funny bone! Anyway it is an amazing poem all the same and every girl has dealt with a cheating scumbag by going through this at one point or another.
Excellent poem.

Kelly
xx

:) truth and beautiful written!

Wow, the ending was awesome, especially the last line. It ended the poem perfectly. It was almost like a scene from a movie. Great write. 5/5

marcella