I Wonder Why I Was Born

Excellent!

For this one, This piece is great, the first thing that I notice is the shortness and simple words that you used. Honestly I can say that is great! But I also notice is I think there is something on this. Maybe because I want to see more edgy words!

Keep on it!

Such a simple dilect here, it almost seems to have a lesser maturity level. However, despite the rhyme scheme being mediocre, the writing level is higher with a higher topic, so it evens out a bit.

{5/5}

[PygmyPuff]

I enjoyed this piece, and many can relate to those feelings. It seems that sometimes you rhyme, and sometimes you don't, so my only suggestion is to be consistent. Other than that...good job. Your last two lines were my fav!
Charisma*

I can deff relate to this one.. very nicely written.. keep it up =]

I felt as though the ending was abrupt and that it didn't flow. perhaps i was just reading it wrong..lol
But i think you have some very good ideas flowering in your literature. Keep writing kiddo.