Great poem
keep it up
-Lisa

Hey, I really like this one! Makes it worth the wait, I think this is one of your best love, well done! My block has broken too. Isnt that weird it's happened at the same time? I'll post it later today. Love youu xo

Oh wow. just made me cry. kudos james and egeleaede you got your strings back. :)

James thats a fantastic poem, see the reason you were in a block was so that you could save up such emotion. great poem James, I really liked it!!!

I really liked this write. I have no criticism to do with the flow,rhythm, rhyming or words in general because, well it was just that good :). However, I did notice some (very non-important) spelling mistakes. You shouldn't take it personally, I don't want this to be a rude thing, it's just that I know there are many poems that get unfairly judged because the reader was distracted by simple errors such as spelling and grammar. It catches the eyes of whoever is reading, and sometimes causes frusteration (or maybe it just distracts them from your rhythm - which is held up too well to go unnoticed). So, anyway, this line:

distant yet shining {threw.}
** 'threw' should be 'through' , otherwise you're talking about the kind of 'threw' for throwing a ball.

And this one I'm not exactly sure about, but I swear there is an 'h' after the 'w' :

like {wispy} clouds I'm torn apart

That's all for the spelling really. The only thing I noticed now was the lack of capitolization - however I try not to talk about that one so much because most of the time in poetry, it is up to the writer. I just saw that you started the poem in a capital, so I wasn't sure if you wanted to follow in the pattern and keep it going...

Anyway, I really don't want to be rude. Please know that I loved the poem itself. The meaning was sweet and heartfelt, and your rhythm kept up so well. I don't see that alot anymore. It was a really well done piece, and I hope I didn't offend you by being all pushy with the grammar lol. It's your work and your decision. Wonderful write. Stay wonderful. :)

That was great babe :)
love your poems
xoxo

Wow, that was really well done, i adored it, WOW, left me speachless
5/5
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Great poem!
The emotions in it are beautiful.
Loved reading this piece.
Take care!