In all honesty, this poem isn't anything special. you took a topic that has been around for as long as man, and didn't develop it at all inside of your poem: no psychoanalysis, no twists or turns of emotion, no plots, nothing. It is shallow, not entertaining, and it neither instructs nor delights. If you wish to write about the hero esque thing, you should read some comics about teh types of people who batle back and forth about this subject like batman. Some batman writersare amazing and I think you could learn from them. also, your rhymy scheme sort of takes out any serious aspect you could have added because it is forced like a younger writer and often gets in teh way of the development of ideas.
10 years ago
by Lets Keep it A Surprise
Oo an eerie vibe chilled my spine while I was reading this. Because reading this poem, I actually got second thoughts about being nice.
Haha wow powerful words with a powerful meaning :)
Uhh I loved this additude you put in this poem! For me it was special I haven't read that sort of poems, ever, so I won't agree reader above(Cory). And also It felt for me like you were laughing at the ones who were waiting for you to be a hero, really liked that!
5/5 Keep it up!
10 years ago
I liked this poem, but the topic was a bit cliche, i have read so many of these type of poems and this is not the best but it was ok. the wording was great and the structure was very readable. it's still a 5/5 from me.
Hah, a truly loely poem. I like it. It's got an awkward rhyme to it. <3
the only issue I have is... NO CAPITOLIZATION. =[
It was good, but the lack of capitolization... sort of irked my nerves. Nicely written...
I love this poem... You have great attitude lol...
Seriously, this is very original and creative, I like it form the beginning to the end. Whole poem has good flow and the topic is truly interesting. You held my full attention through the whole piece, mostly with effective atmosphere and imagery that you created. Truly great idea for the poem.
5/5 from me