Wow, you left me without words... Honestly I love this piece, so deep and sadly true. You wrote it on truly amazing way, it is so sad, ending is so effective and atmosphere that you created in whole piece is excellent, really touching too. I felt message of this poem strongly, you should be proud on her self because you wrote it. Well done!
Wow, you're poem is incredible.
The words just flew right off of my
lips and you did an outstanding job
with this one. The flow was fantastic
and perfect. Nothing at all seemed to
be forced rhymed or any of the sort.
I gave you a 5/5.
Wow!!!! This is very emotional and amazingly written i mean alot of this is actually happening which is really depressing and your bring out that emotion of what is going on. I loved how you kept switching people that was a nice touch 5/5
I really enjoyed this poem I thought it was written very well. Although it was a bit long it keeps the reader hooked after everyline and leaves them wanting more. I liked the fact that you talked about different people from different backgrounds, I thought that was the best thing about the poem. Overall a fantastic job very unique and the title is perfect 5/5 GG23
When I read this title I was immediately interested for I love that line. But as I read the poem it developed it's own being...it seperated itself from the famous title. And then it was beautifully brought together at the end. Because as you think about the last line more and more you start reflecting on the attitudes of the ppl described and they truly are acting every day to hide all the pain...and everyone does it and yet no one understands it fully.
So in case you didn't catch on I LOVED this poem, LOL! Amazing job, keep it up :)! 5/5 without a doubt!