This piece to me was really unique and different. Something about the way you expressed youself really caught my interest and sent my thoughts into motion. You had me thinking from start to finish and I really enjoyed the rare emotions expressed within each line. You ended this perfectly, it was really deep and you portrayed your emotions vividly into this poem and I loved it. Such an enjoyable read which captivated my mind. Well done. ~Mel
Wow... This is amazingly written and truly deep. It is very original, different from anything I've read before. I like it from the beginning to the end, every stanza holds something special and unique.
Truly enjoyable read.
My favorite stanza is:
-Memories, like outbursts,
not the calm intended word.
Speeches I mean,
I like this, alot.
I really like your language and how it alters in a couple places going from very common, everyday to complex.
I would have to say the second stanza is my favorite, "I don't feel the past like sicknes..."
and I loved your closing line.
I liked the poem because is was mystified and intresting--it is complex and one must read into it to find the meaning--and i like that! You opened that poem perfect and followed up by closing it amazing! great write