Comments : Farewell, My Darling...

  • 9 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    Lol it did not feel like a funny poem, so I must admit I cheated and skipped to the bottom before readint the whole thing. very nice Gem lol I enjoyed it.

  • 9 years ago

    by chavii

    Lol what and was i thinking :P
    A very very funny poem, enjoyed its climax lol.

    Take care
    chavii.

  • 9 years ago

    by Cindy

    Gem
    Don't know how I missed this one....I think someone posted so many before yours it got pushed to the second page. Love the way it sounds like your describing somethig else...then the switch up...lol
    Good job!
    Love Cindy

  • 9 years ago

    by Alex

    I don't see how it was a funny poem either. But beautiful nonetheless.

    I haven't written anything in forever, but today I did. And I enjoyed reading your poems to inspire me.

    Alex.

  • 9 years ago

    by gabriella

    Omg that kept me on my toes i thought i t was your husband otr soemthing lol

  • 9 years ago

    by AnotherAries

    This poem is nice I love it...=)

  • 9 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    Lol i would have never thought about a sofa lol. Dang lol weird ideas keep going on lmao!!

  • 9 years ago

    by kati

    Hehe this was great!! you had me fooled until the very end =)

  • 9 years ago

    by AnotherAries

    I hope i find a sofa as good as yours.the that makes me depress when i have to leave..mattr of fact when i sit down i don't feel like getting back up...but i love this poem its so funny,cute thoughtful even though its about a sofa or should i say thee sofa!!...=)

  • 9 years ago

    by Men

    ROFL the suspense almost killed me and then the end just threw me on the floor.

    Great Work

    ^Men^

  • 9 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    Hehehe... great poem... at first I was like oh no she's leaving him... and then its a sofa and I laughed sooo hard... lol

  • 9 years ago

    by Deana

    I have to admit you got me! I`m sitting here thinking "OH NO" her and the guy in the picture broke up and they seemed so perfect......Great job,perfect ending.

  • 9 years ago

    by Natalie84

    You know what...I know this is a funny piece but it's something that is REALLY sad HAHAHA My family had these couches for a very long time and when it was time to get rid of them everyone was a little broken up about it.
    NICE!!!!

  • 9 years ago

    by Ray Blue

    Great entrance~

    The house feels so empty without you
    Everything seems so out of place
    You were always there to lean upon

    It's climatic. Nice poem, 5/5. Keep on writting.

  • 8 years ago

    by Teria

    The house feels so empty without you
    Everything seems so out of place
    [The house feels so empty without you
    everything's so out of place]
    - For some odd reason I wasn't fond with the usage of "seems" I think that it didn't connect well with the word "feel". Maybe because of the double -e? It's just my opinion, though.

    You were always there to lean upon
    To cuddle up to
    Always so warm and inviting
    [You were always there to lean upon,
    to cuddle up to, so warm and inviting]
    - The second line seemed a bit too short and the next line used 'always' again. And, it messed with the flow for me.

    Never complained when I was angry
    And threw things at you
    - I liked these lines. They make the poem original. I don't think I've ever read a poem where people apologized for throwing things at someone else. I'm sure they're out there, but I like the idea of it. Makes it a bit more direct. And, I like when people make poems direct, as long as they're not over doing it.

    You were always there with open arms
    You looked proud and touch
    [You were always there with open arms
    You looked proud and touchED]
    - I'm guessing you mean 'touched'. I'm not quite sure, but that's what I'm assuming by the lines before and after.

    You were fading away, became so pale
    [You were fading away, becoming so pale]
    OR
    [You were fading away, you became so pale.]

    Hahaha. I honestly did NOT expect the ending. I didn't even realize that it was under funny poems, which is odd because there's bright yellowing surrounding the loss of something. Fifteen years is a LONG time for a couch, I've seen them last 9 or 10 but not 15. You must take excellent care of your things. Which is good! (:

    Cute poem, Gem. Really cute.