Very good piece. It mirrors a lot of the feelings I have right now and the things I am going through. You did a good job putting your emotions into your words, so keep up the good work :)

The feeling of helplessness is something i can relate to a lot...
and you portraited this feeling wonderfully...
the emotion in this piece takes my heart...
this is an amazing poem =)
*keep up*
isabel

Beautiful poem. a very nice piece. and very
relateable for me. I loved your choice of
words. And i feel this same exact way every
day of my life. a poem simply too amazing
to use words to describe. :] great write. 5/5.

Loved the poem! theres a lot of feeling in it and i can relate to it so well as can so many other people. 5/5

This poem was great. The emotion in this felt very realistic and the flow fit just perfect.

"It tears through my heart
until theres nothing left
I lay there on the floor
overwhelmed with pity theft"

^ This was my fav stanza from the poem. Great job. 5/5

.:CiNdY:.

This one is heaps good.

"I lay there on the floor
overwhelmed with pity theft"

these were my favourite lines.
The imagery was great and it was very emotional.
xx
Taegan Emily