This was soo moving. every line was so touchng and powerful. lot of emotions in this poem.. a sad write, i liked this line:
"I am still lying where you left me, I know your never coming back...
But hun, just remember I never had anyone to push me [but you]"
"Broken glass and a million old love notes that no longer hold meaning"...... beautiful, astoundingly beautiful. No words for your words to describe how wordless I am.
"As much as I desperately want to throw it all away- I just can't..." Incredible. Cliche emotion, perfectly uncliche presentation of it.
I can't believe this poem hasn't rocked to fame-dom on this website. It is everything I feel, and usually everything I feel is how everyone else feels at the same time too ( I don't quite know how that works... it just seems to be we all feel the same in some way).
Your poem is perfect. There are a few area's of tweaking that are needed, but other than that your poem is a masterpiece. It is filled with the words that I couldn't think of, the lines I wished I wrote.
You have an incredible poem on your hands,
and it was an honor to read it.
I think this poem is too amazing for words. I don't think they're enough words in the world to describe how great i think this poem is! The description was outstanding and the mental image you were able to let the reader get was. .simply amazing. And the emotions let out of the poem was amazing as well. And again, I can't choose just one stanza as my favorite! lol. a superb write! 5/5.
I had to read it several times, I couldnâ€™ t help it, and every time I did I liked it more... So sad, yet so beautiful...
And well, what can I say? I can totally relate, definitely. Actually, I think there is (at least) one moment in everyoneâ€™ s lives when we just feel exactly like t.h.a.t.
I can tell itâ€™ s hard to find the words to explain that ' feeling ' then, and *wow*, you absolutely succeeded, wonderful work.
Anyway, thanks for sharing it with us and keep writing!
Another amazing piece.
although my only thought is for this line
"The after taste of your love is how can you say it- bitter sweet"
i think it would flow much better, and people would read it better as
"The after taste of your love is, how can you say it?- bitter sweet"
mainly since you asked a question, there should be a question mark.
but i loved it
The first stanza makes the reader continue reading but when I hit these stanza's :
Feels like I am watching a movie of our memories, it's on repeat;
There are places where it skips or that could just be my heart...
My head is pounding and the sound of your voice is saying "It's over"
These walls keep getting smaller and my helpless nos grow louder-
Those daggers or as you call them words hit my heart pretty hard,
So darling, tell me, just tell me, what exactly am I to do now?
For once in my life I had someone push me, and oh it hurts like hell;
You still say you never pushed me, I tripped on a rock and fell,
Well if I tripped it must of been on your lies not a rock sweetie-
We should stick to our own stories [that's not really what I want]
If only you would pay attention to at least one of my favorite songs,
They are saying every word I have always been scared to say...
I just completly blanked out!! They're so deep but yet so I cant explain it -.- Let just say you used to most simple words to tell a complicated story..If that makes any sense! xxxx mwah xxx
"Feels like I am watching a movie of our memories, it's on repeat;
There are places where it skips or that could just be my heart..."
^I am amzed again. You seem to have a way with words. These are lines that I am very sure many people feel, as do I at this moment. I feel like I am inside this poem, I feel every line. It's incredible.
Such a beautiful poem. I LOVE it once again. keep it up! =]