Gr8 poem! keep up the gr8 work! that fits me well...im amazed that u can use such large words to rhyme. That's cool! can u mayb chek out sum of my stuff??
~Who Cares?~

Good work as usual. :

Upon my second read through this line really spekls to me "I bare the pain of my own affliction ". Kinda makes you think. Excellent...

The Word Affliction Was Used Too Many Times In This Poem, It Was a Great Word In This Poem With Alot Of Meaning, Be Careful Not To Abuse Keywords In a Poem Sometimes, It Makes It a Bit, Predictable And Common....But Overall I Liked It xoxo-Nikki-xoxo