Whoa that was awesome

"I listened to all you false hope.
I believed in you soothing words.
I smiled my fake smile,
And pretended to be all right."

I love that part. A thing many of us do fake smile. Pretend everything is fine. I think you did a super! Job 5/5

Aw wow Angie. This was sad. But I really liked it!!

At the start you say "I listened to all you false hope" ..I think you meant "all your false hope" ..You did it in a couple of areas of your poem.

You cut through my built up walls,
[I really liked that line, I thought it was worded really well.]

The poem itself though was good. Keep it up!! 5/5

`Taleee. xx.

Very powerful and deep. I thought it was wonderful!

xoxoxo Haley

Very powerful and deep. I thought it was wonderful!

xoxoxo Haley

I found some minor errors in this poem. No big deal, just thought I'd point them out. :)

"I listened to all your false hope."

- I suggest either false hopes* or take out the all to make it sound better.

"So stop you lies,"

- Your*

Now, besides that, the poem was original and very good. It was extremely sad, and well-written. My favorite stanza was the first one:

"Silent tears flow down my cheeks,
Leaving stains as I do weep.
"It'll be alright," you said.
"Just give me another chance," you pleaded."

Keep writing. You have a lot of potential. :) Overall rating: 4.75/5, but I'm going to rate it a 5, because it's more fair than rating it a 4, considering, 4.75 is closer to 5 anyway.

~BJ~

Good work, sad to read but still a good poem. keep writing :0)

Great job! You can still add more imagery and flow to it

It's an amazing poem. I can totally relate to it. Great job!

xoxo,
Chelsea* ♥

"I listened to all your false hopes.
I believed in your soothing words.
I smiled my fake smile,
And pretended to be all right"
That Stanza Sounds Like The Story Of My Life *Hugs* This Was Really Good Angie...Can't Believe I've Never Had The Honor Of Reading Your Work Before 5/5 All The Way xoxo-Nikki-xoox

Awww! This Was Amazing! Emotional...Flow Amazing! I Loved It...
"I listened to all you false hope.
I believed in you soothing words.
I smiled my fake smile,
And pretended to be all right."
Those Are My Favorite Lines...There So True For Tons Of People! 5/5 Brilliant :D
♥
Steph

Awww! This Was Amazing! Emotional...Flow Amazing! I Loved It...
"I listened to all you false hope.
I believed in you soothing words.
I smiled my fake smile,
And pretended to be all right."
Those Are My Favorite Lines...There So True For Tons Of People! 5/5 Brilliant :D
♥
Steph

Wow-there is so much emotion in this! You portrayed it so well and I love how the poem it free verse. It really fits what you are writing---The depth in this piece is amazing and shows that you have a lot of talent so keep it up and Stay Strong----5/5

The line that says "save your lies, and let me go.." i think, thats it, is amazing. you have no idea. it shows, that you are letting go, but it doesnt make to sucidial, or anything. props.

Wow, this is sad, I wrote one similar, please read, it's called in another's eyes.

Hey!! really nice poem .. it's so beautiful.. keep it up girl.. take care.. peace :)

Amazing poem its so beautiful ..check out some of mine some time

I really like this poem.. it reaminds me of my past relationships..except the other way around..

if u wanna u can check out my poem "he will pay" i think it is the same concept.. i dont remember that poem very well..

~scott

Angie --
First of all, I just have to say that you are REALLY pretty! I saw your pic in your profile, and you`re just really pretty. Had to say that. =D
Your poem was really good - I had to give it a 4/5 because of the rhyming. You didn`t keep one pattern throughout the poem, and so I couldn`t tell when, or if, the rhymes were coming. It made it a bit confusing and hard to focus on the poem itself. But overall, it was a really good poem. Looking forward to reading your other one!

Love Much,
Samantha Hollywood

All I can say is that this poem is excellent, i give it a 5/5 keep it up^.^

Wow this is really really good!
its so sad yet beautiful and heartfelt
keep up the good work
love it :)
5/5