This poem is great----who girls did a wonderful job!

Brooke<3

Wow, you guys did a wonderful job, as always this proves how great are you dear. keep up the great job like always...

Wow...wonderful. im going through something kinda like that right now...it sucks...BUT BEAUTIFUL poem...KEEP IT UP!

BabyGurl

This is an excellent write. I love the comparisions and the pain that was portrayed was amazing. The flow was pretty much flawless and overall the peice was great!
great job!
5/5

Amber...

This ENTIRE POEM was beyond great, the metaphors, imagery, and emotion inflicted were awesome, even the rhyme pattern was beautiful, it flowed at a very natural pace and im glad i read it 5/5

You are such a talented writer. I love all of your poems. This was so well done and I could picture everything so well. Amazing work.

Thanks for the comment. It was sorta forced not meant to be, but I wrote that when I was like stuck in a writers block and just found it. Thankfully I think I'm outta that block:)

This is a truly heartfelt and emotional piece. There are some really outstanding stanzas and lines and it was truly captivating. It started really strongly and seemed to lose steam towards the end but this seems to fit quite well with the whole theme of the title. Great job girls!

Oh, its just so beautifully penned.
this poem is a revelation.
i found myself lost in its words.
everytime i click a poem on your page, i know it will be awesome.
no exceptions here of course.
VERY well done.
Kat x

Sorry but I didn't really like it.I could easily tell were one writer stopped and another started.Although the wording was well placed.Over all,a 4/5.I won't down vote it though.Keep writing and remember one person doesn't speak for everyone.

Very well written. nice wording. I do think that having more then one writer stole a little emotion though didnt seem as heart felt as your other poems. But still liked it and no one said all poems have to be from the heart.

The beginning of this poem blew me away. The first stanza I loved so much, the way the words are put together read really well. The next three stanza's were great too. But from then on, the flow became a bit off and the rhyming scheme changed, so that threw me right off. To me, you can't change a rhyming scheme in the middle of a poem. Also, in the 7th and 8th stanza's you wrote 'where' instead of were. Just thought I'd let you know.
But all in all, this was a good poem. The emotion was definately there, which is most important.
4/5 for me.

Tammie

I have never done a poem with anyone before.. I think it's really hard.. but anyway you guys did a great job in this great piece.

Flow was flawless, keep up the good work.

My fave poem by you so far! This was just amazing. The emotions were relateable and real.

"My suns and moons are all faded,
My hopes and dreams long gone,
I can keep singing but,
Theres no music to my song."
^this stanza was just amazing and so beautiful especially the last two lines.

Well done *5/5*

Now this is what I call a poem. This is really beautiful poem, although it's sad. Great job to those who wrote this. It's greatly put together. 5/5<---wish I can put more

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Very nice flow and nice emotions that grace the page where you poets pen has been laid bare. I liked your work and find it a pleasure to rest upon your words. peace