I just loved the truth and reality you described here. It was real easy for many to relate to. All I would advise is to personalize the emotions more and make it more you. The descriptions seemed too simple for me but all in all I really enjoyed it. *5/5*

Aww, sad poem. :[ I hope you're okay if this is true. I'm here if you need to talk or anything. Anyways, back to the poem. I thought it was really heart felt. The flow was a little of, but that's okay. I think the raw emotion in it make up for the flow. Great job!

One little mistake:
I just pray things arent worse tomorrow
^Arent should aren't. :]
Take care!
Cayce xx

But I've lost my hope and my faith,
On the inside I just cry and bleed.

Such sad lines but so beautifully written. The above is my favourite part, the image of crying and bleeding on the inside was really powerful. I also liked the way you ended, conveys an endless spiral of despair. That said, I hope you're not too down. Chin up ay?

5/5

Em xXx

That was really good. really strong emotion. Just remember that life isn't always dark. It tends to find a way to work out. 5/5

Wow wat an amazing poem! its sad but very well written and i can relate to it!!!

<3 i love you silly