Pressure

by RavishingEruption   Feb 17, 2008


That weightless heaviness
Always pushing me down
Breath is stolen from me
Sucked in by the ground

The sky's always pushing
The ground shoving back
Caught in a dream
A never-ending asthma attack

I can't catch my breath
My chest's feeling tight
My battle with life
I'm losing this fight

Pressure is pushing
Stealing my air
I reach out for help
But nobody's there...

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  • 17 years ago

    by StuPiD FrEaK

    I can totally relate in this poem.. Emotionally and literally.. Nice poem!!!

  • 17 years ago

    by Live WeLL

    Wow your word choice in this poem was great! You really get a tense feeling when reading this poem .. and you can really sense someone silently screaming out for help.

    I reach out for help
    But nobody's there...

    That is an amazing way to end the poem. I love poems that end with " ..." I try to use that a lot in my poems too. It keeps the reading thinking even after they finish reading.

    Nice job once again. =)

  • 17 years ago

    by sweet escape

    The sky's always pushing
    The ground shoving back
    Caught in a dream
    A never-ending asthma attack

    I reach out for help
    But nobody's there...

    they are my favorite lines
    it is a great poem

  • 17 years ago

    by never let go of the falling angels

    Good job 5/5 keep up the good work

  • 17 years ago

    by Lemma

    Aww no! Such a sad ending. Really effective imagery, gives a real sense of being trapped with no escape. 5/5

    Em xXx

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