That was a great poem
Discribes perfectly a person with such egoism..but also it has two sides..
Like you said:

" I'm trapped in this cage of life, the key forever lost,
Happiness knows two sides, like a penny being tossed. "

Those lines were great!
Your flow and word choice were very good also.
Well done!
Take care
Xx

One of your best poems, in my opinion.
It contains a very important message and I love your choice of words.

Keep up the great work. ^^
Thumbs up!

Wow, this poem is extremely interesting! Firstly let me commend you for your rhyming, it is absolutely flawless. I really like that you changed the rhyming scheme from stanza to stanza as I felt it was effective.

Secondly, I also truly enjoyed the imagery in your poem. I felt like I was reading a damned fairytale from the very beginning and that made it charming! From the "decorated walls" to the "losing king of chess" I could envision every word you were saying! Spot - on imagery. Well done for that.

Finally, what got to me most about this poem is the sincere and gentle message that it brings forth. Money is not everything. We have been told this millions of times and refuse to believe it! So you tackle a very humane subject here and do it so in an extremely enchanting way! I loved it!

Also, if you get a chance, have a look at my poems and let me know what you think!

Keep writing!

Natalie