Well done my beautiful angel thats the best one yet

That was absolutely beautiful. Repetition in a poem can sometimes grow tiresome towards the end but yours was perfect. There was just a few grammar erros which distracted me slightly;

"it won't help you
no matter how that you feel ill"

Maybe should have been something like;

"it won't help you
for it's what is making you ill"

& also:

"young woman
you're so pretty
so stop worry
if your waist is itty-bitty"

Maybe something like;

"young woman
you're so pretty
so try not to worry
whether your waist is itty-bitty"

But beautiful poem, keep it up!

Alyssa. x

Wow I like it. The ending is much much better and I like how you fixed this part;

"young woman
drop that pill
it won't help you
it will only kill"

Good job! Feel free to check out any of my stuff. x

Best poem by u, i think anyway, amazing i loved it

Best poem by u, i think anyway, amazing i loved it

I wont tell u how to write, but it was..out there...it did have a message tho...a sad one...i liked it....xoxoxo

Wow! Your poems are really good! You should check out some of mine.... :]