Wonderful poem indeed and romantic too

i loved the poem in whole but loved this part very very much:

"with you i find my way , i find my happiness.
if time is an ocean, then i would spend every drop for you.
if time is a drop, then i will spend every ocean on you.
when I'm angry , you know what to do, you just smile and my anger lose the battle against it.
i want to spend a whole day with you.
i wish if my life is one day long.
if we can only talk during night,i wont bother my life being dark.
how can i say?"

Thanks alot

Very nice concept, but there were a couple of grammar checks that are needed. The emotion was great. Overall very good poem.
5/5

Very beautiful poem. I love the feeling for this. It was very powerful. Although, the structure in this wasn't that good. It still looked good though. Keep up the good work. 5/5

.:CiNdY:.

Thz all for the comment

This was a good poem. A little shaky in some spots, but good. :P

I loved the imagery here. You really brought the poem to life for me. Well done

Another emotional poem, you have a lot of talent, keep writing.

Again, this is amazing, you did a good job of expressing yourself out toward him. Hes everything to you and you honestly love this guy to death, thats the best feeling in the world and you are telling us how you feel, your telling him how you feel its amazing.

keep it up.
keep on writing.
love always and forever.

Thz all for nice comment

I thought this poem is pretty common. but there were some things that really caught my eye:

"you are in my eyes, i know how u scared of darkness, thats why i keep it open"

"if time is an ocean, then i would spend every drop for you.
if time is a drop, then i will spend every ocean on you."

these ideas are unique and i believe you can make something exceptional from them.

and as for the last 2 lines, i didn't really get what you meant. Maybe it's just me, i don't know:)

this is not my fav poem of yours, but it has potential. keep it up)
4/5

I thought this poem is pretty common. but there were some things that really caught my eye:

"you are in my eyes, i know how u scared of darkness, thats why i keep it open"

"if time is an ocean, then i would spend every drop for you.
if time is a drop, then i will spend every ocean on you."

these ideas are unique and i believe you can make something exceptional from them.

and as for the last 2 lines, i didn't really get what you meant. Maybe it's just me, i don't know:)

this is not my fav poem of yours, but it has potential. keep it up)
4/5

Again the grammar could be better.
But the imagery was clear.
Keep it up 4/5

"i just cry , i wonder why?"
I thought it was a cheap rhyme.
Sorry, but I wasn't impressed with this one.

I see the points of what other people posted. I do agree with most of them. I'm just picky with poetry. It's not my kind of style. You keep writing though. My comments shouldn't keep you down.

Good use of emotions but didn't quite get the flow.

The flow.. was bad.. but the meaning was heart felt loved it and every word put, just work on the flow.. but beautiful anyways 5/5

I think that you should work on punctuation and capitalize I in some places within this poem. All in all, whole piece is very beautiful and emotional.
The structure of this piece is unusual and the flow is little off in some places because of that.
Overall, enjoyable read.

Good poem, but I didn't like the way it looked. Good job though!!

I liked this poem a lot and felt the emotions when I read it. I thought the flow was a little odd, but odd isnt bad. Good job =)

~*Caitlin*~

I really did like this poem. I got it, but parts of it don't make sense with how it's worded. You have great emotion in it, though.

And, I'd try stanzas, eh. It's your work but this is my suggestion;

I miss you when you're not around,
I just cry - I wonder why:
Then I realize, that it's my tears . . .
coming out in search of you.

You are in my eyes -
I know how you're scared of darkness,
which is why I keep it open.
With you I find my way,
I find my happiness.

If time were an ocean,
I would spend every drop for you.
If time were a drop,
I would spend every ocean on you.

When I'm angry, you know
exactly what to do.
You just smile and. . .
my anger loses the battle.

I want to spend my day with you,
which I wish was my entire life.
Yet, if we can only talk at night -
I wouldn't mind my life being dark.

How can I say - You're an angel
without the halo and wings or
An angel is you with halo and wings.