This is a really good poem. I absolutely loved it. It's short, but it's really emotional. The flow was great and the rhythm is good. Great job! 5/5

.:CiNdY:.

For the third stanza there should be an apostrophe in daughters making it daughter's. Or should there...? Well I'm asuming she owns her eye and since they're used for ownership. Ah anyways. It was a unique poem. I really liked the first two lines. I'll give this one a five.

This is really creative, I thought the ending stanza was written perfectly!

Wow, you really captured the strong feelings of love with your poem.

"It's a heart too feeble to start a conversation,
and a mind too ill to touch the sky.
It's a feeling too strong to cross the border,
and a line to thick to begin to part.
(these were the most perfect opening lines)

"It's more than I've asked for,
and more than I've wanted.
It's too strong for me to break -
and I need you here and now."
(I love how you describe the love and show your readers how strong and unchanging it is.
And the need for this love)

"You're too far to wipe the tears,
from your needy daughters eyes,
and too far to see the pain -
caused yet in disguise.
(These lines were so emotional and they really capture the feeling of wanting to say I need you and I love you but I just can't tell you whats wrong)

It's a flame of love ignited,
ready to burn out -
but I've kept it waiting daily,
in case you turn around.
(I love the metaphor of the candle and the way you ended it with waiting for him to come to you)

Overall that poem was very beautiful and full of meaning. 5/5

First off your title doesn't seem to creative but somehow it still caught my attention, thats the job of a title of a poem, so i guess you did a good job with that,

First Stanza:I am utterly confused by To, Touched I cant tell if you accidently typed part of it twice or thats how the poem was suppose to be but it makes no sense to me,
The rest of this stanza was very good at describing the weakness of your heart,Somepeople use very weak similes which can piss me off because it gets annoying but you used two classic ones (I think) and it came out nicely,

Second Stanza:Some people may think its annoying how you Repeat It's but i think it puts a nice rythm to the poem and it's much easier to read, I also like the first two lines it may not be original but it is well used, The hyphen is not correct I don't think a simple comma would of done,

Third Stanza:Impactful first two lines, very heartfelt, but the last line "Caused yet In Disguise" Shouldn't it be something like "But yet Still in Disguise"? Im not sure but Caused makes no sense to me.. And again the hyphen I don't think its gramaticaly correct.
oh and i like the un intended ryhme here.

Final Stanza:ooo hot damn, use of title + Strong finish = 4 to a 5 Other than the hyphen again lol very good ending, I wasn't even exspecting that much of a finish out of this poem, good job "But i've kept it waiting Daily, Just Incase you turn around." Love it,

Flow 4/5
Emotinality 4/5
Impact 6/5
Ryhming N/A

overall= 4.7 = 5

Very creative and well written =]

Oh wow this is glorious!!! I love it, this piece can be taken multipe ways and I really like that about it... for me it sounds like a little girl being abandoned by maybe her father? I would love if you would PM me and tell me if Im close... great job... 5/5

Keep it up yours are good

Teria,your poems are amazing.