It may not be classified as a poem to some rigid jackasses, but i like it. it does have some sort or rhythm, and it carries itself quite fluently fiv out of fiv. =P

Great Job! 5/5

Its beautiful way to write and you got the talent and soon you will get better,as every day we learn more, i love the feeling behind this words and so keep write

Lacks a definite structure but i like how its seems to ramble and demand answers, as in desperation. i have an odd taste i guess, but good job anyways :P