Heck it's a wonderful free verse poem girl. I really like the line "Without you I wouldn't be me," I can really relate to that one :) You did a wonderful job and you obviously feel a lot for this guy. I hope his knows how lucky he is.

This is a heaps cute poem...
I wish I was in your shoes....
Being so scared to lose someone...
Like atleast you've gotten to the point where you someone actually means that much to you!!!

5/5

Sorta getting what Im saying?
Haha

Could you comment&rate my poem
"RIP skanky franky - Fav poem bout Frankie"

Tnx ;D

xxxxx

Okay , its sweet lovely poem and i realy love the feeling behind the words you write, you can be better, keep write, keep your love

The imagery, theme, and style was very generic, but I could feel the emotion within the first line or two so for that I applaud you for writing this. Can't say, without lying, that any of the lines or images really stood out to me. Well anyway, you expressed the core emotion very well, so because of that I enjoyed it.

It's a good poem and it's a good way to express your feeling for someone especially when you have a hard time telling them face to face....Good work keep it up.

It was such a sweet poem.It really seem to show your feeling great job! i hope you keep write :)

It didn't follow a normal poem's style. But it was very well written. And it had a lot of emotion to it which is really what most of poetry is about. I really enjoyed reading this and it really lightened my mood :)

The first "you" in the poem, you spelled "u," just letting you know.

Without you I wouldn't be me,
`That line would have to be my favourite of the whole poem. It's easy to relate to and it says a lot.

So overall, the emotion was in the poem and made it sweet, but I feel like you could do better with the way you wrote the poem. Many of the lines you used, I have seen in a lot of other poems and it just turns your poem cliche, which took away from the appeal. Often I find the lines awkward -- work on your syllabication and it'll make your poem a hundred times better. Generally, it was okay in my opinion. The feelings hidden within the piece just made it better, and since you're writing this for your boyfriend, that's a good thing. It was pretty good, but not great.

Keep writing.
--..MiNDYY

I didn't like how you didn't write out the words
ex. u-you
I thought the flow was a bit off
next time try counting syllabols
the message was pretty good and I connected with it
nice job
4/5

I liked it. thought the flow was a little off and the word choice was ok. 4/5
it was a good poem though

Very good strong meaning and its well writen and from what i can tell its writen from the heart and thats the only true poetry good job

Its great,.love it 5/5

"You have seen me laugh and you know that it is because of you I do"
That "I do" part makes that one line repetitive, and it throws the stanza off. I suggest you take out the "I do"

"My love for you is unbreakable and indescribable"
This is kind of repetitive, too. Well, the "my love" part is and that throws the stanza off. Maybe you could trying re-wording it, like this. .
"For this love I have is unbreakable and indescribeable"

And the first stanza was off, but it also depends on how you read it. . Anyway, those were just some suggestions, you don't have to change your poem, kayz. :] Anyway, I can really relate to this poem. I feel the exact same way, but about my [ex]boyfriend. :[ [he moved away last year] But I deal. So nice write. 5/5, still. :]

This is really quite beautiful, and this is something i wood definately love to hear from a girl

very good
keep writing