All I really get from this is a sense of impotent anger. I bet, on reflection, that you could structure this in a traditional poetic form and come up with something rather more exhilarating while maintaining the clear strength of emotion.

I like it the way it is actually.
It is really true!
Great JOB

I like it this way..you could try something different with it but dont delete this one...ITS Friggin true...so true its scary...im on my own branch...building my own numb tree lol...anyways i was reading my private messages and decided to look what you have been writing lately i havent been on here for ever...anyways keep your head up and keeping smiling!

I like it this way..you could try something different with it but dont delete this one...ITS Friggin true...so true its scary...im on my own branch...building my own numb tree lol...anyways i was reading my private messages and decided to look what you have been writing lately i havent been on here for ever...anyways keep your head up and keeping smiling!