*Clicks tongue against roof of mouth* Good, good. Very good description of our fallen angel here, rythming at times a little forced, but nothing too bad... I do, however, suggest that you replace the word fluffy, it seems a little out of place? None the less, a powerful ending line, oh and 'sallow ashen face' was a good one too.

Nyah, hope I helped. Keep up the good stuff bud,
Schemilix ~

Umm.. this one was well honestly i couldn't grasp themeaning...but idk.....
***aly****

The description and flow were great. But like Schemilix said, fluffy seems a bit out of place. All in all it was a wonderful poem.

I like how you actually wrote about a fallen angel. This really made me use my imagination [which I love doing]. I'm really into all the fantasy stuff. :]

I think you used good vocabulary and all the rhymes were good, as was the flow. The descriptions were wonderful, but as I was reading it I couldn't help but feel like you tried [too] hard. It just seems kind of forced. There's also not anything in here that makes it stand out. No uniquness. It just kind of blends in with all the other dark fantasy poems.

Even though I didn't really feel connected with this, it was definitely a good poem. Maybe I'm just off today. Oh well. :\ Great job!

Keep writing!
Cayce