Comments : Beautiful Lady

  • 11 years ago

    by LOVEmeNOT

    I think the poem is really good.
    && i loved how you ended it. i thought it was cute.
    like the imagery in it and how you take us from your daydream to the reality.
    its good. =]

  • 11 years ago

    by David

    Love the title, this is an awesome poem, well written with great wording and depth.

    5/5 David

  • 11 years ago

    by Cindy

    You have done a good job on this piece the imagery is great.

    Why am I singing this very loving song?
    Your scenic hair blowing away my fears
    I gaze at your face, and you shed a tear
    I will take you to a place filled with secrets.

    This stanza is awesome. What a unexpected ending leaving the reader with a smile.
    Take Care Cindy

  • 11 years ago

    by StandStill

    Did i see this on yahoo the other day....?

    great poem anyway....

  • 11 years ago

    by Andrew

    This is nice, well written it is. Keep it up

  • 11 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    The gates of heaven open
    I see a beautiful lady walking
    I sit here watching her from my bedroom window
    I hear the birds talking

    ^^Reading the first stanza led me to believe this was a transition from life to death. A kind of out of body experience.

    Why am I singing this very loving song?
    Your scenic hair blowing away my fears
    I gaze at your face, and you shed a tear
    I will take you to a place filled with secrets.

    ^^My thought are reafirmed with what I belived to be an angel, coming to escort safe passage to Heaven.

    I wish to kiss those enchanted lips
    I crave to hold those two miraculous hands
    And whisper to your ear
    Touch your soft beautiful face and
    Tell you why today we are in this place,

    ^^This stanza confused my initial thought. Why would you be kissing an angel?? And what is with the miraculous hands??

    I will take away all the pain and sorrow and,
    We shall meet again tomorrow

    I wake up from this daydream . . .

    ^^ahh, I see! (I think?) Dreaming of a passed loved one. The kind of dream you never want to end.

    The beautiful lady behind me kisses my cheek and,
    Ask me out to go get Neapolitan ice cream.

    ^^ A confusing, but quirky end to a wonderful dream.
    Well done.

    Michael

  • 11 years ago

    by Fake Facade

    Great poem.
    lovely ending, really unexpected.

  • 11 years ago

    by Pamela G

    That was sweet dream! Great job.

  • 11 years ago

    by The Queen

    Beautiful, awesome poem..Sweet, cute words were wonderfully expressed..It has a magical touch..i dunno..i was like part of the daydream too..

    As for me, the guy was describing how he feels towards the gurl he loves...and simply by juz lookin at her, his thoughts was filled of all the love for her dat made him into a daydream only to wake up amused and filled wit happiness coz that girl in his dream is for real..

    Good Job...5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by minh

    Wooo, i enjoyed this poem, relates to how you wish for something you want, and realize it's there. great poem!

  • 11 years ago

    by Im not broken anymore

    Well i must say i really injoyed this one.. It was nicely wriiting and puts a image in your head awsome job