Comments : To a Cheater, How's This for a Game?

  • 13 years ago

    by StandStill

    Jesus christ jesse...where did this come from????

    Reader can you hear it?
    Can you hear her heart beat?
    She found out your a cheater
    Thats why she can't sleep

    ^ this made me catch my breath...reader can you hear it?

    But did you know you killed her
    Look deep into those eyes
    Can you see the hanging rope
    In the tears she cries

    ^ this is the best stanza, i believe, i have read. ever.

    wow. just wow.

  • 13 years ago

    by CalGirl

    Omg, mr tomato, this is a miraculous finding. I can't believe you had it in you. omg. u could totally get this published. It has flowing rhyme and rhythm. Also, very nice moral. I applaude you.

  • 13 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Wow i liek this, the ending line is really good aswell xxx

  • 13 years ago

    by MeltInHisArms

    Wow, a very true and touching poem. it happens everyday and u put it words that just r so amazing! 5/5
    xoxo
    ~me~

  • 13 years ago

    by RB

    Suspenseful and just amazing. this was such an interesting piece. great flow! the message in this poem is wonderful. i hate players! and this poem describes them so well and puts everything into perspective. any guy or GIRL who has ever played someone should read this. amazzingly written. honestly. best part....

    "But did you know you killed her
    Look deep into those eyes
    Can you see the hanging rope
    In the tears she cries"

    ^i could see that rope. i rly could. well done!

    5/5!!!!!!!

  • 13 years ago

    by Mike Wilburn

    Great story, the answer lies within.

  • 13 years ago

    by Silently Screaming

    Damn that was amazing...

  • 13 years ago

    by 0oAshleyo0

    DANG!
    im speechless... that is amazing!

    Reader can you hear it?
    Can you hear her heart beat?
    She found out your a cheater
    Thats why she can't sleep

    this is my favorite stanza cause this has happened to me and its true.. you cant sleep....

    great job!

    XxAshleyxX