Comments : Rising From the Ashes

  • 16 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Dear Luanne,

    I am happy for you that you were able to make your relationship a fulfilling one again, that is a very difficult thing to do!

    Hugs for you sweetheart,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    Luanne
    This is such a heartfelt piece. Brings tears to my eyes.

    No longer dreaming, the impossible dream
    flutters flow through veins, in harmony
    No longer the usual I love you said more out of habit
    but now with truth, sincerity and meaning
    Something we almost lost ... forever

    There are so many ways to say I love you....when you are with the one you love the most you can tell the difference......I'm so glad you have found this once again.

    Happiness fits me well
    [frown] dangling on the edge of extinct
    aspirant dreams do come true
    feeling and believing that today
    love is a "combined" feeling not just "I" ... anymore

    This puts things in perspective so well....Iy is a feeling for two. ...Sometimes we don't think and you turn around and find yourself alone....and it is a very bad place to be.

    Excellent piece.
    Love Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by Elapsed

    Really enjoyed this exciting piece, the way the story changed from bitterly sad to a joyful one was quiet a clever write! We all love a happy ending but when we also take and learn a valued lesson, It makes it that much sweeter. Amazing depth of emotion and feeling.. loved it!

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Luanne, First of all I would like to thank you for the lovely comment you left me. I appreciate it muchly. Sorry that it has taken me this long to return it to you.

    This piece of poetry here is simply beautiful. Your words have left me mezmirized as they are so heartfelt, emotional and touching. Your started the poem in a hurt and sad state yet ended it with such beauty. I loved the contrast you portrayed and I'm also happy that things have ended, or should I say started over again nicely for you.

    Happiness never seems to fit me well
    [frown] dangling on the edge of a smile
    aspirant dreams on a burning rope
    clinging to the hopes that someday
    love will be a "combined" feeling not just "I"

    [we] used in casual conversations
    "incerity" just letters, meaning nothing
    not a word, without adding the "s"
    like love without the "l", meaningless
    notice me please, I'm gathering dust

    I adored the stanzas above, because the emotions were so rare, so raw and filled with so much agony.

    Yet.. I enjoyed these two so much more.

    No longer dreaming, the impossible dream
    flutters flow through veins, in harmony
    No longer the usual I love you said more out of habit
    but now with truth, sincerity and meaning
    Something we almost lost ... forever

    Happiness fits me well
    [frown] dangling on the edge of extinct
    aspirant dreams do come true
    feeling and believing that today
    love is a "combined" feeling not just "I" ... anymore

    The elegance you portrayed over the atmosphere was divine. From your flow, to your word choice. This piece had everything an amazing poem should be.

    I can't express the feeling this poem have given me. I feel hope from this peice. It's almost as though you have taught me not to give up and that things can work out in the end no matter how difficult and tough the situation may be. I'd like to thank you for that as I do appreciate it. Thankyou for sharing this piece. It's gorgeous.

    Well done. ~Mel