Good rhyming!!

Thanx

I think this is very good, it reflects a life, longer lived than yours, which is sad and touching too, well done, you have talent, xp

Wow! Iam-indeed astound to your poem~

I am from a world of long lost dreams
a home where my hopes were ripped at the seams
i am from the pain of a little girl
who hadn't yet found her place in this world
i am from the darkness and tears on my face
and all the betrayal i could never erase
i am from all the screams and the fights
that lasted all day and into the nights

Such powerful writting :) 5/5!

Rhymes fit very well, created an amazing flow:)
keep it up:)
loved it!
5/5

You did a really great job making sure the I am from didn't get old :) it sounded great every time :) The flow was awesome, it read very well, almost like it had a rhythm, like a song.

the only part I would try to fix was the end of the second stanza:
"i am from moving again and again
i am from it all, especially the sin"

everything else rhymed and it made me stop for a minute cause I thought i'd read it wrong. besides that it kept me almost entranced :) great job

5/5