I Killed You Right?

Wow this is a really intense poem. I can feel the pain in the way you write, almost like its alive! Very deep indeed.

"I love you like no tomorrow
Living for each moment
Believing with no doubt"

This is my favourite bit in your poem. You describe your love so beautifully, latching onto it as if for survival! A beautiful concept.

I get the sensation from this poem that the person who your character broke (dont know if it is you) was already broken and it is almost like they were trying to find salvation with your character's love. But we all know that one can only save themselves, spiritually anyway.

A great poem full of emotions! Good job!

Also, if you get a chance, have a read over my poems and let me know what you think!

Natalie