Acid

Great poem iloved from begaining to end

Wording and complexity are top notch. I felt the emotion from the first line to last. 5/5.

Wording and complexity are top notch. I felt the emotion from the first line to last. 5/5.

"Life washed out losing any hope
Shining stars of beautiful light will fall
Love can save the dying from departure
Even the loneliest soul can find a heart"
=> Yes, I totally agree, love can save lives..

"Never before had such an interest been shown
A cracked broken perspective of a man
How could any angel love this mess?
If birth is a miracle of note, this was proof of God"
=>This beautiful, amazing, bravo!

"Meeting by chance in the random winds of life
Her presents contradicted his entire existence
Eyes that could light the darkness
Shining into the depths of a boys depression"
=>I like the expression "eyes that could light the darkness

Awkward chance allowed for awkward love
Nights of pleasure days of pain
Every love has its own failing
Weakness were hard to find without nights cloak

Such beauty could not exist in the dirty world
Then angels love died from deadly addictions of dirty needles
Her eyes no longer shone but became a cold Grey
Mid-day highs were taking their toll
=>Sorry to comment, but should it be "Then angel's love..

Her life was lost, her wings broken by our addictions
Beauty turned to broken skin
Cracked lips dry with blood could not speak
This beauties soul burnt by injected acid
=> Sad....

And what of her love, the lost unwanted boy?
Was this loss his gain? His life to be saved
Who would know?
Fighting for life, for undeserved salvation

"Guilt rots the human mind
Continuous hammering strikes the dark corners of his mind
A thunderous sound of hate
It states my crime, it is my punishment

I am sorry
=>This part is not structured in my head..

Shortly: This is really beautiful, touching poem and the writer of it is very talented. You got my high 5. :D