Comments : Actually, thank you!

  • 16 years ago

    by Boy

    I hope your satisfied with what
    You have put me through
    Its hard to hate
    When I still love you

    this poem touched my heart.... how sad this is.. i agree you are thanks to your loved one. but i think those all pains for you.. and you suffered with it.. often we say these words to who we love. and they break our heart.. without any care. its so so sad..
    welldone on this poem

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Even though I am mad at you
    And you have brought so many tears
    And you probably thought I wouldn't say this
    In a hundred million years

    ^ The first line, you could make the "I am" to "I'm" . I like this stanza. It's a good beginner stanza for the poem. Simple, but understandable.

    But I would really like to thank you
    For all you've done
    You teared up my heart to many pieces
    But glued it back to one

    ^ Second line: I think you should add the word "that" in between "all" and "you've" . And for the third line, maybe change it to "You teared up my heart [into so] many piece" And I like this stanza too. I like the way you worded it and structured it.

    You took away my hopes and dreams
    Just to give it back
    You woke me up from my fairytale
    Reality is what I lacked

    ^Fourth line: you should add the word "For" in front of "reality". I really like this stanza. I think many people have been through something like this. [To have someone hurt them so much that it opens their eyes into reality] It's happened to me 3 years back. And my life has never been the same. .

    So really thank you
    For crushing my self-esteem
    Now I know how much trouble it took you
    To tear my life into seams

    ^First line: you can change it to "So I want to thank you" It would make the flow of the stanza better and in the last line, "in" would sound nicer with the stanza. This happened to me as well. And it really hurts though. .

    I hope your satisfied with what
    You have put me through
    Its hard to hate
    When I still love you!

    ^I think that the "with what" should be part of the second line. Third line: you should add the word "so" between "it's" and "hard" to, again, make the flow nicer. And this was a beautiful and sweet stanza.

    I really like the poem and the idea behind this piece as well. I really understand and relate to it. because all these things happened to me as well. And I feel the exact same way, that I kind of want to thank him for making me see, you know. It's like this poem was about my life. [lol j/k] But I really like how the rest of the poem is contradicting of the first stanza. [Unique structure] A very nice write. 5/5.

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This well written poem reflects conflicting feelings I can really relate to

    great work