Your immense diction was used beautifully. i loved it. you seem like such an intelligent person that i am sure your works goes right over a lot of people's heads. =)
wonderful, once again.

I loved your imagry! (spelling?! LOL)
I think this is a really well writen poem!

Such good use of words in this and tells such an amazing story!

5/5!

Keep it up!

Danielle
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Yes^^agree,great imagery

"Solitude daydreams with her bleeding heart."

Very strong opening, this draws the readers who want to read more.

"Her mocking hell stabs and wounds her consciousness,
relentlessly probing her now shattered mind.
She longs, no, she hungers for the homecoming,"

I like your choice of wording here, a lot better than most poets would do.

"Meanwhile, in the shadows, whispering haggard faces -
recoil in repulsion from the curdling, manic screams.
Her distinctiveness is lost; drowned in an tears of depression.
There will be no escape for her!"

Very good use of imagery here, I can really picture this and other readers can as well.

"Stumbling he curses, piercing her ghostly mists; "

I like how the second stanza is about the male character and the first stanza is about female character. This shows variety in the poem which is a good thing. And with both the male and female character in different stanzas this shows contrast.

"Just daily pain from habitual lies, inevitably he commits a slow suicide.
There will be no escape for him!"

Your flow here is very good. Its subtle but it gets the job done right.

"Pity these fools and their wretched dungeon.
Worthless resentment reeling within tied vowels.
Alas, these times are miserably steeped in confined despair.
Perpetual regrets revolve and turn an eternal matrimony.
There will be no escape for them"

This has to be my favorite stanza, it was very complex and to the point, which is what made it so great. It was a perfect stanza and it was perfectly written. well done.

"Through the mirror is a serene, virtuous world of radiance;"

This was a strong opening to your final stanza.
Overall I liked this poem. It was strong and in depth, better than a lot of other poets I've seen.

You've definatly impressed me here. This is soooo excellently written. :]Wow, I'm speechless. Isn't it amazing what you can write about just observing a picture? :] You did a wonderful job. Your writing is awesome. Don't stop writing. and Inform me when you've got some new stuff up. I'll be happy to read it! -5/5-

Wow, this was amazing, i added it to my favorite poems

5/5

Oh, I already commented with RubberDuckiex3.. Oh well! This poem was really good considering it had no rhyme. The flow was really good actually! I found this poem really interesting which made me try to picture myselfwhat the picture you were looking at looked like. This was a really good poem.. You should continue to do non-rhyming poems.. XD .. Great work 5/5