Comments : The looking glass (version 2)

  • 15 years ago

    by Lu

    The painting is a great addition to the poem. It gives one a look into the visual that inspired such piece.

    Loneliness spills its cold sobbing oceans.
    Drenching lives that now silently die.
    ^^^
    I love these lines in your opening stanza. Amazing visuals created!

    Spewing a storm of rot from inside.
    ^^^
    Great line!

    Pity these fools, in their wretched dungeon.
    Resentment, reeling within tied vowels.
    ^^^
    Very creative line woven here!

    There is no escape for her!
    There is no escape for him!
    There is no escape for them!
    ^^^
    I love how you ended the 3 beginning stanzas ... her, him ... them

    Very impressive read you've penned here. Your words like an addiction ... I seem to keep returning for more.
    Excellent read, as always
    Luanne

  • 15 years ago

    by MusoXDanielle

    Very impressive piece of work!
    Have to say i dont know which one i prefer!! lol...

    You are a great writer as i have said many times before and i think its a privilage to read your work!

    Keep it up!

    Danielle
    XX

  • 15 years ago

    by Goodbye

    Micheal, this is awesome work. You are amazing poet. I love this poem...wow.. 5/5