Very sad piece. The emotions are strong. Just needs a few little things fixed. Good job!
Take Care Cindy

I can feel what you're going through
cuz you made the emotions so strong
Hreat poem 5/5

My World As Just Ended
-- I think you meant "has" instead of "as". Just a little typo.

It was a very sad poem. :/
Especially the end when you say you're dead. I think a lot of people can relate to this though. I know I can. Your emotions were very strong, and it was very easy to feel what you were going through if only for a few seconds while I was reading it.

Cayce