Nitin
This piece is so very sad. I love the word choices and imagery you have used.

One more time i will try tonight
With shots of courage in my vein
To write my fate in burning light
To decide the end of this everlasting pain

Spmetimes the pain and sadness in our lives just seem to take over all our thoughts. What we wouldn't give to be able to change things.

One more chance i will take today
With a scared smile on my lonely face
Life will surely be so different someday
When my existence will be hard to trace

Whne things have gotten so bad you feel that it has not mattered that you have even lived. That no one would miss you if you were gone.

Like a tear i fall from my own eyes everyday
Like a star i shine in the shadow of night
Monsters are within me for the rest of days
To write my fate in this fading light

Hope that star of yours shnes bright enough to chase away all those demons.
Excellent job!
Love Cindy

Hey sweet Nitin!

What a sad poem you have written!
Are you having problems? Please tell me if you need my help with praying, alright?

Hugs for you,

Ingrid

"One more chance i will take today
With a scared smile on my lonely face
Life will surely be so different someday
When my existence will be hard to trace"

such agonizing words within this stanza. The heartache was expressed so well throughout.. great job!!

Nitin

when you write sad poems, it seems like everyone around you feels the pain - the words are so raw with emotion.

take care my friend. there's nothing in the world that cannot be healed.

thank you for being there for me

good luck and peace
shobhana

"Life will surely be so different someday
When my existence will be hard to trace"

so beautiful and so hearfelt... amazing write...

It was hard to stop reading it over and over again!
If you would please excuse me I will cry a million glass tears for you.
HUGS.
DiamondEYES

I love it. end of story.

Very good write nitin. great rhyme structure and flow. 5/5 from me my friend. all the best wishes ben thompson

Good work, i understood where you were coming from.

This poem is amazing! i loved it!

I like this a lot. It's very emotional.

A very overwhelming poem,

The tone was somber and fearful. Which made the poem rise very well.

The last verse:

Like a tear i fall from my own eyes everyday
Like a star i shine in the shadow of night
Monsters are within me for the rest of days
To write my fate in this fading light
^^^^^^^^^^
Very affecting and stirring

Keep writing! [5.5]

Best wishes,

Sarah

Anything said to praise your writing is not enough.

Soul touching!!

This poem is amazing =]
I loved your chioce of wording and the flow is excellent
Your style of writting it's very captivating
Your a brilliant writter ^^

I loved the flow, how you have managed to pen down your thoughts so well!! god job!!