Holy hell. scary, but good.

That was good!
keep it up!

Structure wise, it si long one: with no rhyming
it is better you split into paragraph and then add ryhming to it

This is my favorite kinda poem...Dark stuff are like a magical key to my heart..
I loved many words and expressions in ur poem like
The sun sheds blood, through the flaming veins of its critical heart pain.
This image of the sun is so fantastic when u showed it as a human being that sheds blood..

Drowning you in their sins of their worshiped devil..
This one is so deep and dark ...I loved it
I don't know what to choose to be my favorite part bcoz it was all more than awesome..

Wow..
This Is Kinda Scary,
Yet Very Interesting,
I Loved The Detail You
Put In It..
Great Job..

This one is cool! so cool i remember Harry Potter and Lord Voldemort .. i love magic, and your words are a wonder to the magical world.. Keep it up!

Its really cool and good! keep it up!

Omg i loved it kinda dark but keep up the awesome work!

That was quite scary, but i really like the line "Never fear, fear itself." We fear what we do not know. Thanks for commenting on my poems. :)

Love it!! this really great! you have lots of talent!
5/5

~KiKi