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by Ares   Apr 8, 2008


Candle-lit dinner lights up the room,
I wonder when you'll save me,
from currently residing in a pit dark gloom,
and I stare at you now just to feel free.

We'll steal a moment,
from all the monsters,
we'll steal a moment,
to get things right.

so I pour you wine to get the feeling right,
I wonder if you're as drunk as I feel,
you promise me a glorious night,
give me a command even if I have to kneel.

We'll steal a moment,
from all the monsters,
we'll steal a moment,
to get things right.

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  • 17 years ago

    by miracle

    I love this

  • 17 years ago

    by Goodbye

    This is a lovely romantic poem. Well done. I like the stanza:

    "We'll steal a moment,
    from all the monsters,
    we'll steal a moment,
    to get things right. "

  • 17 years ago

    by Sarah

    Great poem! So lovely and romantic especially the following stanza:

    ~We'll steal a moment,
    from all the monsters,
    we'll steal a moment,
    to get things right~

    Very unique. [5.5]

    Best wishes,

    Sarah A

  • 17 years ago

    by Sarah

    Great poem! So lovely and romantic especially the following stanza:

    ~We'll steal a moment,
    from all the monsters,
    we'll steal a moment,
    to get things right~

    Very unique. [5.5]

    Best wishes,

    Sarah A

  • 17 years ago

    by Gabba Gabba Hey

    Another good poem! Rich with images. Suggestions:

    you forgot the 'n' in moment on the first refrain thing! The only other thing I have to say is that on the last stanza, the last line seems a little forced, which is always annoying with rhyming lines, mine almost always have that problem (:P), but that's something to think about.

    Otherwise, good job, I look forward to more!

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