Very nice.. flows nicley.. keep it up!!.. ^-^

Good poem. but i think that it could have more emotion and better word choice. you did a pretty good job with the flow and the message was great. i love the ending. keep up the great work hun! :]

I think you could have used more descriptive words. Like the first few stanzas have the word "breath" in them a lot. Maybe you could find another way to describe it or another word for it. Also I thought there could be a little more emotion within this poem. And with the exception of a few spelling errors the rest was great. Great job, keep up the good work.

Good poem 5/5

Last stanza, is breath taking.
the imagery is spot on,
the flash backs were a very good touch. (i wonder does that really happen? anyway)

t5h ereppetition throughout was also a good wee youcj.

very sad. but well written, i saw mo9re structure in this poem, and it made it easier for me to read 5/5

Aww... lovely...niice work 5/5

Beautiful! Loved it!!!!!!!
So deep and filled with emotion!
5/5
Well done!!!!!!!