Open Wound

I love this it says self harm in your face and you done it so well, with words and thoughts from the heart....Great work a pleasure to read.

As the blade crosses my flesh
I know I can't go back
The thing I've broken chases me
And makes my blood run black

*I love this. I can really relate to doing something and regretting it later. I love the dark images too*

Chased down by demons
I stumble in the dark
Fleeing broken promises
Finding shelter in my mark

*I like this. I would change the last line to "finding shelter with in my marks" I'm not sure why but that sounds better to me. Anyways good work*

Thin red lines criss-cross my wrist
I've only betrayed myself
I rip my heart from my own chest
And place it on a shelf

*The first line wa perfect and I just loved it. I can really see the cuts on your arm and I know what that's like. Amazing ^.^*

Cutting through the fortress
To find myself within
Leaving behind my morals
Committing every sin

*I think this was my favorite stanza. I just love the diction you use here. It's flawless. I also love that the flow is constant.*

Blood pours from me
Out my Open Wound
I can never stop
And I know that I am doomed....

*Wow...this was so good Tara. I think you portrayed a cutter's life so well. I love the details and the vivid imagery. Keep it up sweetie ^.^ Nik*

Great one, well written.

Wow i love it

That was great =]
dark and understandable.
thx ; )