Comments : Im Sorry

  • 16 years ago

    by Coffee Loves Nachos

    Baby it is ok... fore I love you and nothing will change that.

  • 16 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Aww thats good, hope it all works out, keep writing xx

  • 16 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    This definitely seems like a venting poem. Writing is a great way to let off some steam or just get things off your chest. It's a very good coping mechanism [sp?].

    to what has given me life

    ^^ "given" should be "giving".

    fore they are trying to protect me from what is wrong.

    ^^ "fore" should be "for".

    Just a little tip: Punctuation really does wonders for a poem. It helps the reader know when to pause and take a breath. I know you have a few periods in there, but some more punctuation would really help it out.

    Hope everything works out!

    Keep writing!
    Cayce