First stanza, second line, you forgot the E in the.

First stanza, seventh line, I think you made a mistake. The only this with this rhyme,
Only this with this?

Other than that, I really liked it. It was a sweet poem and your rhyming was consistent throughout the poem and the way you put the words together turned out lovely.

Seeing how I saw very few mistakes and how this was a well put together poem I think I'll give it a four. It was good. :)

Oh one more thing! I felt you used commas too much. Some places I felt could have been a complete sentence and you just used a comma. Other than that great job.

Good job.
**harlea