Thats really good. I think that is really sweet. I am kind of living that story i jus need that happy ending. You will totally hav a future with writing! XD

Good poem
written with emotions and fully aware heart

This is right to the point...the line "I dont care you are right or I am wrong
I finally see,we just dont belong." that says it all....good job.......xoxo

Very well written.. A different style
Keep up the good work coming.
5/5

Cheers :)

No offence, but this poem needs a lot of work before it even comes close to being a excellent write. First of all use the English language correctly. Use the word You and not the letter "u"

The puncuation and structure were both good. Your overall concept of the poem was well thought out, but with a few adjustments this could be an outstanding write.

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Today was like yesterday,
Like wednesday or like another day
Why you are asking me to stay?
Going is the only right way.

^^The very first line told me how this whole poem was going to be written, "In the words of a kid" Honestly the first line made me want to turn away and stop reading. How many sophisticated people do you hear that say, "was like" ? I can tell you, not that many that I can think of off the top of my head.

Perhaps re-wording this whole stanza would make it flow and be an more enjoyable read. So for example:

Today felt as though it was yesterday,
Wednesday or any another day.
Why are you asking me to stay?
Leaving is the only right way.

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The overall write was just ok for me, like I said above, the work, this could be a good write.

Peace, Joe

THAT IS WHAT HE GETS FOR CHEATING ON YOU BUT HE SHOULD LEARN HIS LESSON... HOPEFULLY AND US GURLS DONT DESERVE TO BE PLAYED BUT I LOVE THIS POEM=]

Another 5/5 poem!
I can definitely realte to this one.. Guys suck! It's as easy as that :P hahaha
But what doesn't kill you makes you stronger right? =)

Anyway, it's a great poem!!