Steel plated doors give no solace
Nightmares chase her troubled sleep
No escape from flashing memories
Life's journey not hers to keep

Just another masterpiece, loved the imagination and the selection of words. no escape from flashing memories....just the imagination of flashing memories...wow..gives that chill deep inside. Great imagination once again dear. Well deserved poem, congrats for the win.

Its fun taking part in challenges along with you.

all the best and take care

Black wrought iron fence stood guard
With sharp points reaching for the sky
Demons within these walls screamed
Her spirit needed freedom to fly
^^^
Searching for the freedom yet the cold black demons within ground the soul.

Looking down upon the remnants
Blood soaked bricks begin to fade
Bright light enfolds her in warmth
Her dues on earth have been paid
^^^
Cindy I love this ending. I interpreted this as:
She lived in hell on earth, now heaven is her reward for all that she endured.

A very thought provoking piece you've penned here my friend. You have definitely stimulated my mind.
Excellent
Luanne

Cindy,

We both made a very diferent poem with this title. But strange enough they are both about pain, mental pain:(
I am so glad we are friends and able to give eachother some comfort and a warm shoulder:)

The poem is beautiful by the way:)

Love, Ingrid

Beautifully sad lament Cindy....perfectly constructed to flow with imagery and emotion...

"The bricks of the house she escaped
Glinting like red blood in the sun
Like hers that had drained from her heart
The day she decided to run"

^You've put so much of yourself and your heart into these lines....I like how you've compared the bricks to the blood/heart.....walled in and constricted...the heart fails to thrive!

"Looking down upon the remnants
Blood soaked bricks begin to fade
Bright light enfolds her in warmth
Her dues on earth have been paid"

^When weary dayshave passed and the path leads to Heaven....what we all yearn for....well said!

Great entry for the challenge!

I disagree that your rhyming is forced in this one. I understand the inspiration for this piece and it is heartbreaking. The flow is good and I understand exactly what his poem portrays.

^Windows bleak bars held her in
Keeping others safely locked outside
Trapped soul forever entombed
Tortured pain she no longer hides^

This reality is unfair. To put it in a poem like this rips at my heart.

^Steel plated doors give no solace
Nightmares chase her troubled sleep
No escape from flashing memories
Life's journey not hers to keep^

It is sometimes easier to stay awake and avoid our subconcious thoughts. The last line makes me want to cry.....

^Looking down upon the remnants
Blood soaked bricks begin to fade
Bright light enfolds her in warmth
Her dues on earth have been paid^

This is one of the saddest poems I have ever read.

The end is an angel on her way to heaven. I don't want to lose her and I am selfish for that. I don't know another person who could walk a mile in those shoes and still give love, hope and inspiration to so many people. I LOVE YOU AUNT CINDY!

Oops it is suppose to say THIS poem, not his.

Wow very powerful. great job you have done there xxx

Wow,what a great poem. keep up

Cindy,

This piece was quite the beauitiful gem. I felt the emotion within each line was just pouring off the page.

The saddness people go through in life is just unbelievable. Though I believe they will be gifted with heaven as a reward for all their pain and suffering.

Windows bleak bars held her in
Keeping others safely locked outside
Trapped soul forever entombed
Tortured pain she no longer hides

The stanza above touched my heart deeply, The punishment and agony this girl, this women is going through is heart wrenching.

The deeper meaning behind this poem was very interesting and truthful. U felt as though my heart was braking within each stanza.

This was a stunning poem.

Thankyou for sharing. ~Mel

Lovely poem yet again..

keep up d good work..

best wishz... Karan

This is so melancholic and sombre. pain of suffering is reflecting through your words. very imaginative and a great poem.

Really really good poem!!!!!! 5/5