At first I thought that this was going to be too long, but once I finished it, I thought it was amazing. It was a fantastically expressed story. I didn't realize until the end that it was ALL a dream. I figured that this was a dream come true.
A few things need fixing

"Gently she opened her eyes,
As I look at her I become mesmerized,
What wonderful sight,
That I'd never get tired of looking day and night..."

^^on "What wonderful sight" I think you need to add an "a" so it would be
"What a wonderful sight."

Also, at the end of the poem, the final word should be "stop" not "stopped".

Overall, a very good story. Word choice was simple, but not cliche. I liked how there was no real beat to the rhyming scheme.

GOOD JOB!

5/5
Take care.
~Lace

Omg,its nice feeling you have for her,its nice to see true love anywhere,and i realy like how exactly you show us this moment,i love the powerfull words and the rhyme,its new.
little long but still good,
great jop,and keep write,keep work.

It seemed kind of daunting to read at the beginning but towards the end I was wishing for more. So maybe you could even add onto it if you want..

All in all it was a very powerful poem. Keep up the great work. 5/5 from me.

Awh! This is a really good poem, I can relate to this because I have dreams all the time, but beautifully written and good job. :] 5/5

Aww! hah. I'm sorry but the ending was sad & funny at the same time.

This was really enjoyable to read though there was the middle section that had an awkward flow but it ended up pretty good.

Goodjob.

.Kay.

It was a beautifull poem, full story appeared to happen before me.

its too good..........

Wow i never saw that ending coming to tell you the truth, i was lost within all of the deep poeticness you seem to have. it was absolutly great a def 5/5.

you can tell this was a piece of your heart you wrote down so that every could see great job -
raindrops 5/5