Great work hun keep them coming xxx

Well written and great rhyming.. keep up..! :)

Let's first start with the title. I don't think you should write it all in caps, and I don't think the exclamation marks at the end are really necessary.

Now onto the poem.

life is not a word to say
to know you must follow the way
`` I'm very confused here. I don't get what you're trying to say. Maybe word it a little more clearer?

to live , you must in love fell,
`` This was worded very awkwardly and only to fit the rhyme, which then makes the rhyme feel forced.

laugh and cry , smile and weep
`` I don't like how in the line above this you used cry, and then used it in this line too. Also weep is just another word for cry.. so it's like you're saying the same thing in the same line.

and feel the pain when he is tared apart
`` Do you mean teared apart? Even then it wouldn't be right. It should be tore apart.

sometimes, you laugh till the you see you tears,
`` "you" should be "your".

Okay, this poem didn't really interest me, but that's just my opinion. I think it could use more metaphors or similes, and maybe just more emotion. It was a little bland and boring to read.

I'm sorry if this comment is offending; I'm really not a mean person. Just honest. >< I hope that's okay.

I'm sure you can do better, just reach inside yourself and let your emotions flow. :]

Keep writing; never give up!

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