I can't see much wrong with it. The flow is quite good and its pretty straight to the point. I think a lot of people could be thought of as being the coward when it comes to life. They get stuck in simple routine and never branch out to live the life they could or want to live. Some even complain about it which pisses me off. If you are unhappy with your life all you have to do is change it for the better its quite simple, yet they choose not to hear the message. I liked you poem quite well keep up the good work.