Comments : My Music

  • 15 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    This is a nice little write, you might want to edit it to take out all the "?" The flow wasn't bad, but wasn't great, Perhaps using some puncuation would help. I would like to have seen this piece a little bit longer than it was, since I started to read and then poof it's the end. Overall it was in my opinion just ok.

    Peace, Joe

  • 15 years ago

    by BlueEyedMystery

    It's short, but it definitely has potential. I love it when people write about music. Music is such a poetic and beautiful thing. I know you have a little bit a punctuation, but it needs more. Punctuation helps the poem flow better, because it lets the reader know where to pause. I think your descriptions could be a bit better too. They just seemed a little plain. This was pretty good, it just ould be better. ^.^ Hope this helps.

    Keep writing!
    Cayce

  • 15 years ago

    by VYXSIN

    This poem, although short, is really really good. i liked it alot. keep writing your a very talented writer.