Comments : Darius, (a short story)

  • 15 years ago

    by Nix

    This is interesting, I love it, very vivid write, well done! I would Honestly love to hear more, you are already very good in descriptions of action and battle, you kept my attention in each sentence, and I would also like to hear what is the actual story behind this.
    You greatly described very memorable and intense scene, I enjoyed in this. You have little error in the last line.
    If you add more please let me know with p.m if it isn't too much trouble for you.
    I would gladly read more right now, I don't know what to say except that you captured my attention a lot, the thing which is interesting is in which direction will you unfold this.
    Anyway enjoyable read.

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is really as good as anything I have read in a novel yet I hope it is not a legal confession if you would parden my pun
    Imust ciear my mind of the headless priest if it is not needed in the next mini chapter