Ooo, I love the personification you used when he said life hated you. Very good line. Creative.

The a man without worries line was good too.

Aww, that was a sweet poem. :) You care so much for her, I can tell. I only hope that you feel better and find someone, or Harlea, to take care of you and love you.

4 out of 5.

Nice

I can tell a lot of effort went into this, i think people who can write lyrics this well are just so fab!! well done. excellent work xx