by Sebastian Han May 11, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
first love
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When you are lying beside me |
by benjamin
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This was an ok poem.. i think .. for the ryhmes though you used the same word .. me .. then me ... or world .. then world .. try to find something that ryhmes .. unless your are trying to prove a point.. then you can repeat that word or couple of words other wise you got the point across pretty well.. |
by Lakota
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Wow, t hat is such a beautiful poem!! You must really love this person. One of my favorite lines was: I miss you badly even you're around me |