Very good, I liked it a lot and you were like idk about it and all... whateva... keep writing baby girl

Like your style of writing
but it's more than emotions beneath the sheets in my bed,
it's like a gate trapping demons inside of my head.
-fav. part
this is a 5/5

"The heart of the broken, shattered tonight;
tears of the fears of the midnight fright,"

^My favorite lines.Perfect.

As in your other poems that I have read, your word choice is excellent.It began smoothly and ended strongly.5/5

-Amber

Wonderful work. My god, i loved this. i think im gonna favorate it and i dont ever favorate poems :]

as for critisism, i dont have much to insult about this, nothing seems wrong, my personal writting style is to make the words flow almost like a song, if you will. but there is nothing wrong with what youve done, its all just my opnion y'know? 5/5<3

And "tomorrows" day shall not last.
and "tomorrow's" day shall not last.

Fallen dreams of a "cowards" mind,
Fallen dreams of a "coward's" mind,

Comment: The apostrophe shows possession

slithered into imaginations you "can't" find...
slithered into imaginations you "cannot" find...

Comment: Contractions weaken the feel of the poem

but it's more than emotions beneath the sheets "in" my bed,
but it's more than emotions beneath the sheets "on" my bed,

Comment: Sheets cannot be 'in' your bed, rather 'on' your bed.

Great poem and rhyme flows well.

5/5

"Falsified liars live in my past,"
Aren't all liars false?

"Forbidden fruits lay in my womb,"
Good start to the poem, I like this line, assuming that this person is pregnant when it wasn't planned? With past regret, attached to it.

and mannered qualities within a tomb.
Fallen dreams of a coward's mind,
slithered into imaginations you cannot find...

"The heart of the broken, shattered tonight;
tears of the fears of the midnight fright,"
I love these lines, they add depth into the poem, through images and your clever play on words.

The rest of it was great, your language and phrases are perfect.
I love the ending, it's sad but still fits into the life category because it does happen in life a lot, the confusion and other (relationship?) hurt.

I can't really critique this much, I really like this.

Wonderful work, 5/5

jess ~

You have some buetiful word choice better then whatever i could comprehend and i love that in poetry. sweet ars job there
Raindrops 5/5